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高考英语满分作文及名师的评析

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  【全国卷I】

  【试题回放】

  假设你是李华,你在报上看到北京电视台今年七月将举办外国人“学中文,唱中文歌”才艺大赛。你的美国朋友Peter正在北京一所大学学中文,你觉得他应去试一试。请按以下要点给他写信告知此事,并表示可以提供帮助。

  比赛时间:7 月18日 。报名时间:截止到6月30日。报名地点:北京电视台

  注意:1.词数:100左右 2.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯 3.参考词汇:才艺大赛—talent show

  Dear Peter,

  I read in a newspaper today that a “Learn Chinese, Sing Chinese Songs” Foreigners’ Talent Show will be held in Beijing Television Station on July 18. I know you like singing, and you are in Beijing during that period. I think this is a good chance for you to show your singing talent, and how well you’ve learned Chinese. If you would like to try, you' U have to go to the TV station to sign up before the end of June. If there is anything I can do for you, I would be more than glad to help.

  Yours,

  Li Hua

  [名师点评]

  从整体上说,本文书写得简洁明快。语言简单平实,要点囊括齐全,结构完整。本文的主要特点是让步状语从句的使用,最后两句话,采用了if引导的让步状语从句,结合将来时使用。

  【全国卷II】

  【试题回放】

  假设你是李华,加拿大一所学校将于今年暑假组织学生来你校访问。其间,Andy Smith将借住你家。请你代表全家写信给Andy,欢迎他的到来,并告知有关事宜。信的要点如下:

  1. 上午:学校活动2.下午:游览市区3. 晚上:看电视,玩游戏,聊天

  注意:1. 词数:100左右2. 可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯3. 参考词汇:安排arrange

  Dear Andy,

  I’m so glad that you’ll be here with me and my family for the summer holiday. I’m writing to express our warm welcome and introduce the activities during your stay here.

  In the morning ,some activities at school will be arranged. You’ll visit our classrooms, reading rooms, labs, and so on. We’ll take this opportunity to exchange our views, talking about school life, and so on.

  In the afternoon, you can tour around the city. And I’ll act as your tour guide. Our city has changed a lot and takes on a new look. You can see what is our city like with your own eyes.

  At night , we can watch TV, play games and talk about what we’re interested in. I’m sure you’ll enjoy yourself. I’m looking forward to your coming.

  Yours sincerely,

  Li hua

  [名师点评]

  本文行文自然流畅,文章要点齐全,意思表达真切。详略得当,重点突出。从语言使用的角度来说,不但使用了一些生动的动词,准确的名词,同时为了使本文串联自然,又使用了时间状语为连接词,将文章按照时间顺序叙述完整。

  [浙江卷]

  【试题回放】

  假设你是李越,你的加拿大笔友Steve来信说,他和他的一些同学正在学中文,请你推荐两本学中文的词典.根据下表提供的信息,请你给他写一封回信.

  英汉/汉英词典新华字典

  收词18,000

  20,00010,000

  价格52元11元

  特点大量例子、用法说明,适合初学者中国最常用的汉语字典

  参考词汇:

  · 推荐 recommend

  · 英汉/汉英词典 The English-Chinese Chinese-English Dictionary

  · 新华字典 Xinhua Dictionary

  Dear Steve,

  I’m so pleased to learn that you and your classmates are learning Chinese.

  I’d like to recommend the following two dictionaries.

  The English-Chinese/Chinese-English Dictionary is really a good one for beginners. It has 18,000 English words and 20,000 Chinese words. Besides plenty of examples, it has many notes telling you bow to use a word. Xinhua dictionary is the most popular Chinese dictionary , and it has a vocabulary of 10,000 words. It may also be useful to some advanced learners of Chinese. Of the two, ECCED is the more expensive, costing 52 yuan, and XD costs 11 yuan.

  Please let me know if you want me to buy these dictionaries.

  Yours,

  Li Yue

  [名师点评]本文要完成的是书信的主要部分,因此不需要注意格式,但是不能遗漏要点。本文要点齐全,内容完整,详略得到。介绍的时候,层次清晰,逐一举例。文章流畅而连贯。有很多关于词汇和字典的表述,值得我们积累。

  [广东卷]

  【试题回放】假设你是下图的李华。请根据图画所提供的信息,写一篇英语作文,描述昨天晚上邻居看足球赛影响你学习的情况,并描写你随后与邻居交涉的过程

  注意:1. 词数:80—120

  2. 可以编写对话或其它叙述方式描写你与邻居的交涉过程

  About 9 o'clock last night, I was doing my homework. Suddenly I heard my neighbor shouting and laughing loudly. He was watching a football game on TV. I couldn't go on studying and became impatient. I covered my ears, trying to keep the noises out, but failed. So I had to go my neighbor.

  I knocked at his door and said," Good evening, Mr. Yang! Could you please turn down your TV a bit? I am doing my homework.'

  “Oh, I'm really sorry to have disturbed you. We'll do as you say.” My neighbor said politely.

  “Thank you very much..” I said and went back to continue my study.

  [名师点评]

  这篇文章从整体上来看,内容完整,要点齐全。在准确领悟题意的基础上,用平实的语言,将文章娓娓道来,连贯而流畅。句式搭配长短结合。文章对对话的描写,很生动,让人有种身临其境的感觉。

  【英语各档次的给分范围和要求】

  第五档;

  1. 完全完成了试题规定的任务。

  2. 覆盖所有内容要点。

  3. 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。

  4. 语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误,但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致;具备较强的语言运用能力。

  5. 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使全文结构紧凑。

  6. 完全达到了预期的写作目的。

  第四档:

  1. 完全完成了试题规定的任务。

  2. 虽漏掉1、2个次重点,但覆盖所有主要内容。

  3. 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。

  4. 语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确,些许错误主要是因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致。

  5. 应用简单的语句间的连接成分,使全文结构紧凑。

  6. 达到了预期的写作目的。

  第三档:

  1. 基本完成了试题规定的任务。

  2. 虽漏掉一些内容,但覆盖所有主要内容。

  3. 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。

  4. 有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误,但不影响理解。

  5. 应用简单的语句间的连接成分,使全文内容连贯。

  6. 整体而言,基本达到了预期的写作目的。

  第二档:

  1. 未恰当完成试题规定的任务。

  2. 漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容,写了一些无关内容。

  3. 语法结构单调、词汇项目有限。

  4. 有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误,影响了对写作内容的理解。

  5. 较少使用语句间的连接成分,内容缺少连贯性。

  6. 信息未能清楚地传达给读者。

  第一档:

  1. 未完成试题规定的任务。

  2. 明显遗漏主要内容,写了一些无关内容,原因可能是未理解试题要求。

  3. 语法结构单调、词汇项目有限。

  4. 较多语法结构或词汇方面的错误,影响对写作内容的理解。

  5. 缺乏语句间的连接成分,内容不连贯。

  6. 信息未能传达给读者。

  不得分:
 

 

 


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