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  一家宾馆新开业,为吸引外国宾客,希望在互联网上进行宣传。请你用英语为其 写一篇文字介绍。主要内容包括:

  1.地点:距白山入口处500米;

  2.房间及价格:单人间,100元/天;双人间,150元/天;热水淋浴;3.餐饮:餐厅,咖啡厅;4.游泳池:全天免费开放; 5.欢迎预定。

  注意:1.词数100左右,开头语已为你写好;2.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。

  Welcome to Baishan Mountain Hotel!

  Baishan Mountain Hotel is now open for business.

  500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, it provides single?person room, of which the price is RMB100 yuan per day and the number is 20, and 15 double? person rooms, with a price of RMB 150 yuan per day. It also provides hot water bath service. You can enjoy both Chinese and western food in the restaurant and drink coffee and tea in the cafe. The swimming pool is open for free the whole day. All these services can bring great convenience to you and are very enjoyable. So come to enjoy yourself!

  Welcome to book rooms in Baishan Mountain.

  【名师点评】

  本文开门见山,首先点明了主旨。本文最大的特点是应用了很多比较复杂的句式,使文章比较出彩。开头使用了独立结构交代宾馆位置。which引导的非限制性定语从句的使用也很正确。总地来说,文章句式精炼,是篇不错的满分作文。

  积累卡片英汉互译

  好词 1. provide v.提供2. convenience n.便利

  好句All these services can bring great convenience to you and are

  very enjoyable.所有这些服务都会给你带来便利,并且非常的愉快。

  评析:bring great convenience,带来便利。

  【安徽卷】

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  假如你是李华,美国一所友好学校准备与你们学校共同创办一份中学生英文刊物,该校格林先生来信询问有关情况。请你给她写封回信,假如你是李华,美国一所友好学校准备与你们学校共同创办一份中学生英文刊物,该校格林先生来信询问有关情况。请你给她写封回信,主要内容如下:

  l 表示赞成。

  l 提出你喜欢的栏目。

  l 简要说明理由。

  注意:

  1. 词数100左右。

  2. 新的开头和结尾已为你写好。

  3. 适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。

  4. 参考栏目:栏目—column

  Dear Mr. Green,

  I am very excited to learn that we are going to start a magazine together. That sounds great! And I definitely agree with you on that.

  Some of the columns which you mentioned in the letter are really my cup of tea. Say, “culture express” gives us a better understanding of the world. Since people from different parts of the world have different values, it’s necessary to learn from each other. This will offer a wonderful chance. Apart from that, “blurt out” is pretty good for Chinese students to learn English idioms and improve oral English. Last but not least, “entertainment” is so cool! The popular singers, actors and celebrities are so catchy and attractive that you absolutely can’t miss it! Teenagers are just fond of the trendy things.

  Well, I can’t list more. I really can’t wait to read that magazine!

  Yours faithfully,

  Li Hua

  【名师点评】

  这是一篇满分作文。由于这篇作文的出现,导致了安徽省今年的英语作文分数普遍偏低。仔细分析了这篇文章,写的的确是好,很地道的美式英语,一些词语的大胆使用,让人不得不猜测此人或者是家人可能有过国外生活的经历,否则这么地道标准的英语,可不是一朝一夕所能写出来的。

  比如说:my cup of tea, apart from that, oral English, last but not least, celebrities, catchy和trendy的大胆运用,list, can't wait to 简直是perfect! 况且文章中没有一个错误,不管是书写还是语法。英语能够学到这种程度,不可谓不让人佩服。

  【江苏卷】

  【试题回放】2007年4月29日上午10点到11点,全国亿万学生阳光体育活动在各地大中小学校同时进行,江苏省1,100万学生积极参与了这项活动。

  教育部倡导学生:

  u 每天锻炼一小时

  u 健康工作五十年

  u 幸福生活一辈子

  请你根据以上提示,用英语准备一份发言稿,向同学们讲述一下阳光体育活动的有关情况,并就高三学生是否需要每天花一小时锻炼,谈谈你的看法及理由。

  注意:

  1、 发言稿应包括以上所有信息,要有适当发挥。

  2、 词数:120左右。发言稿的开头和结尾已经写好,不计入总词数。

  3、 参考词汇:阳光体育活动——a national student sports program;

  教育部——the Ministry of Education

  Good afternoon, everyone,

  The national student sports program, waged by the Ministry of Education and aimed at improving students health, was held from 10:00a.m.~11:00a.m.on April 29,2007 in many primary and middle schools all over China. Almost 11 million students in Jiangsu province participated in this program.

  The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years. Our whole life will be very enjoyable.

  In my opinion, we senior high school students should do exercises for one hour a day even though our spare time is limited. Health is a basic condition for our study. If we did not do exercises, we wouldn’t be able to get good study records. So every one of you, join the program now!

  Thank you!

  【名师点评】

  本文的结构十分明晰,同时句式使用得熟练而准确。本文分为三段,前两段叙述,后一段发表观点,典型的作文结构。在句式使用上,作者用法多样,使用了独立结构和虚拟语气,十分出彩。复杂的句式是本文的特点之一。

  积累卡片

  好词1.wage v.发动2.aim v.瞄准3. advocate v.提倡

  好句1. The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years.

  教育部提倡我们每天做一个小时的运动,能够健康地活50年。

  评析:advocate,其后接虚拟语气,可以省略情态动词。

  2. If we did not do exercises, we wouldn’t be able to get good study records.

  如果我们不进行运动,我们的学习成绩就不会很好。

  评析:虚拟语气。

  【重庆卷】

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  据报道,7岁的美国女孩Amy Bruce得知自己身患肺癌后处于极度的痛苦之中,美国抗癌协会决定,每当Amy收到一封慰问信,就给她增加3美分的治疗款。

  假如你是新华中学的学生李华,请你用英文给Amy写一封慰问信,主要内容包括:

  自我介绍

  得知的情况

  表示鼓励

  打算为她做什么

  祝她早日康复

  注意:

  1. 信的格式已为你写好

  2. 信中不得出现你的真实情况。

  3. 词数100左右。

  4. 请在答题卡上作答。

  Dear Amy,

  I’m Li Hua from Xinhua Middle School of China. I’m sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brought you great pain. But you should realize that you are young and have a promising great future. So, stand up and fight against the disease! I’m sure you will win. It is reported that the America anti-cancer association will donate three cents upon every comfort letter you receive. So I will tell your situation to all my friends and ask them to write to you. In that way, you will get enough money for you to be cured. Hope you can be well soon.

  Yours,

  Li Hua

  [名师点评]

  本文依照要求,涵盖了所有要点。文章使用了高中常见的句式,如I?m sorry to hear that..., It is reported that...等,都比较好。作者对定语从句的使用恰到好处地修饰了文章,行文自然而通顺,值得学习。

  积累卡片

  好词1.realize v.意识到2.promise v.允诺3.donate v.捐赠

  好句1. I?m sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brings you great pain.

  我很遗憾地得知你身患肺癌,给你带来了巨大的痛苦。

  好处:which引导限制性定语从句。

  2. So, stand up and fight against the disease!

  因此,坚强地与疾病做斗争吧!

  好处:掷地有声,语言准确。
 


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